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 Meg's Application
« Thread Started on Jul 19, 2009, 7:36pm »

ooc//I'm not sure if I have to make one but I will just in case.By the way, Mizuni, it's me meg from MizuClan.
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Trees stretched out infront of a small tabby tom-cat as he gazed at the forest.He could hardly believe how vast his clan's territory was.Behind him a dark brown she-cat padded out to him.

"Duskpaw I told you to wait for me before you left the boundery of camp."The moody she-cat meowed as her tail twitched.

"I'm sorry Ruffledwind.It was just I couldn't wait to see what laid beond the camp.I won't do it again."Duskpaw mewed

Ruffledwind snorted and took the lead into the dence forest, with Duskpaw bouncing along behind her, his new future opening up before him.
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« Reply #1 on Jul 19, 2009, 9:41pm »

This needs some more attention:

The scene opened up weakly so that I was confused when it started. It's lacking detail and that's really about it. If you work on detail it will make it easier to follow and read. Lastly, the conversation between your two characters is short and unconvincing. I know what you can do in roleplay and that you most likely wrote this really fast. If you give it more time, you should have no trouble at all.
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Welcome to Neko wa rurou shimasu (wandering cat), a new unique warriors roleplay for the literate and advanced. How are we so different? In this roleplay, the four Clans are not related to those from books. Although named after them, the founders were not blood related to any cats from the original four Clans. But what's the point? Well, in each Clan, the cats carry a different power.
Our suggested roleplay literacy is literate to advanced. Beginners are urged to find a more beginner type forum for warriors roleplay.

The world has never cared for our existence. We have always been different. We were once apart of the four, but after realizing the powers we held we vanished, never to be seen again. However, we refuse to lay down and die. We have powers that we can use to live, to save, and to kill. We are more than just cats; we are warriors.

It was a long time ago, but most still remember. It was in the Clans formally known as ThunderClan, RiverClan, ShadowClan, and WindClan. It was in these Clans that siblings had been separated by StarClan, each carrying a power. Their names were Thundershard, Shadowcry, Windstride, and Riverblossom. For moons they lived apart, barely knowing of the others' existence. Then, one night, all four were given dreams. When their eyes awoke in the dreamy atmosphere of the island gathering place. All four siblings blinked upon seeing one another. Confused, they kept their distance, but as the starry figure of a StarClan cat arrived, the truth about their kinship was reveled. Stunned into silence upon realizing their blood, not one spoke. Then, the StarClan cat told them of their powers, how Windstride can bender the wind to his liking. How Thundershard would control the high storms. That Shadowcry could steal away into the shadows of objects and others, and how Riverblossom could move water with only her mind.
Then came the words, by the cat of death. The four must go, they must hide. With such powers, those around them could be hurt and worse, if one Clan had all four the Clans would cease to exist. So, the siblings left but as they traveled they came across a wonderful land with move for each of them and their Clans. And so can the new ThunderClan, RiverClan, ShadowClan, and WindClan. For with their powers, they would be unstoppable.


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Icy winds blow through the trees an din the early mornings frost clings to the ends of every leaf and blade of grass. Leafbare if here, bringing with it chilly mornings and frozen nights. Prey scatters and the stress of the four Clans just escalates.





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